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You burn my heart
And left it snow.
Now your presence
Does graces my soul.
With great awareness
Making it slow;
While staring at
Your lovely soul.
Tags: Love, Poem
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Sure I did. And hope you share a mutual feeling for mine too
Thanks for your like and visit Vin. i LOVE the fact you chose ‘Criticise’ for your comments box!
Hope you take the following in the spirit it is intended ( of making you an even better poet!)
Consider Graces rather than Does grace, makes the line a little tighter, snappier.
Consider Making instead of That makes – same reason.
and lastly Staring is spelled with one r :-)
Could you put the second line in another form?? I Like the contrast but as it is it may be confusing to some readers.
Thanks, I will see to your valuable criticism and apply the changes. Thanks
Eyes of love
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