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Staring at your soul

You burn my heart
And left it snow.

Now your presence
Does graces my soul.

With great awareness
Making it slow;

While staring at
Your lovely soul.

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5 Comments

  1. quiall says:

    You have a voice. Thank you for following my blog. I hope you enjoy your visits.

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  2. lwbut says:

    Thanks for your like and visit Vin. i LOVE the fact you chose ‘Criticise’ for your comments box!

    Hope you take the following in the spirit it is intended ( of making you an even better poet!)

    Consider Graces rather than Does grace, makes the line a little tighter, snappier.
    Consider Making instead of That makes – same reason.
    and lastly Staring is spelled with one r :-)

    Could you put the second line in another form?? I Like the contrast but as it is it may be confusing to some readers.

    love.

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  3. Jack says:

    Eyes of love

    Like

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