Breaks my heart to remember
I once thought that forever
We could last as good poetry
But unlike the broken pieces
You are lost in unused ink.
I know you are so convinced
I never did existed
But don’t you remember;
When it was love it was love
Not the hate-red you paint it.
© 2018 Http://vinzpoetry.wordpress.com
And
http://thelaurapoetry.wordpress.com
Written by Onyeche Vincent Onyekachukwu and Ananaba Laura
Notes:
Below is the original tanka by Laura, I (Vinz) modified and added mine (Above)…
“It breaks my heart to remember
I once thought
We would last as long as poetry
I watch the sun set
I’m convinced you went with it”
Disclaimer: it was just a collaboration of poetry for fun and publication not a display of affection or heartbreak please
👏🏼 for you both: “we could last a good poetry”- this could be us, you were lost in unused ink”- you were lost elsewhere(another)
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That’s all poetry, she dropped a tanka and I modified it
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I get it now
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What were you thinking?
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An heart breaker
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Well, It is all creativity. We all on the WhatsApp group, from.Nigeria need to write a Somonka about our identity
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I’ll think about it
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Ok
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Ok…
I always tell you guys in our WhatsApp Poetry Challenge group that I love poems when structured.
A somonka is a 10line poem (two Tankas)
Each line made up of 7syllables
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Yes boss
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Just go to church ma
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I’m a Muslim sir
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Okay… Sorry
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This is the original tanka by Laura, I modified and added mine…
It breaks my heart to remember
I once thought
We would last as long as poetry
I watch the sun set
I’m convinced you went with it
Disclaimer: it was just a collaboration of poetry for fun and publication not a display of affection or heartbreak please
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Ooooo. I get now
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..getter
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I now get the ink part as well
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Lol
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“When it WAS love it was love”- when love dey e Dey well well, “but you painted it hat-red”- i see cupboard love here.
I hope I didn’t derail, lovely write you guys did 💋
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Mrs Neemat… Where is the cupboard love ?
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Hate-red is what I called cupboard
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Explain mummy pls
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No need for explanation you said if already
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Make my wife catch this your weird thinking excellent brain .. We go boil am like boiled egg
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Yimu,😏 we know that’s impossible and besides, I’ve said it severally, I’m not so poetic and all
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O’get mi’…. Lol
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😂
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Lol
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✌️👌
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Thanks CJ
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