Talking to myself through poetry
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You only
Get one chance through the
Door called life
Ignore the
Texture of the frames
And doorknobs
Ignore size
And wall space, focus
On purpose.
Ignore all
Accessories of
The thresholds.
Door to door
Distractions will come
It is true
Always know;
One thing is certain;
The door slams.
Do not stand
Nor spy; keep moving
Via the door
With goals; reach
Through and through to
Enrich you
Not door frames
And doorcases, they are
All add-ons.
I know your dad do not like me And I know your mum detest me I used to have this self control Avoiding critics and…
I am a man whose thoughts and foods Are; “good walls makes good neighbors” So I can’t break it to you Fools like me respect…
Watch the company you keep Sweep fairweather if you can Let go of an excess weight Appreciate every wingspan. Like an iron and the magnets,…
I sat down with a rich man On the same kind of rattan I couldn’t alter a word But enthusiasm swirled I watched him from…
Insightful.
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Thank you
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My pleasure
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I like the poem but the last line looks a little aloof in the last stanza
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Thank you, pls can you emphasize on “Aloof” last staza
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Reach through for
Soul enrich(ment) I can’t tell but it’s not structurally sound
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Yeah, I was forcing 3 /5/3syllable
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Through and through, – means throughout an entire extent.
Using just soul enrich might not should well. I will edit soon
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No problem with the through and through….just put it to show that the soul enrich wasn’t just sitting well
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Check out the new version…. Critic it pls if any error or off key is noticed.
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Let’s work on Stanza 6, the ‘one thing is for sure’ it should be ‘one thing is sure’ if you need two beats use “certain” instead of “sure” but I think “one thing is sure” is pretty cool
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Okay, thank you. I appreciate
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